I got lost immediantly because I didn’t know who was talking.«1» I agree, great story line, but very hard to read. I couldn’t read this. Sex I got lost immediantly because I didn’t know who was talking.Anonymous readerReport 2009-04-20 21:44:26Could you possibly put quotations to seperate who is talking. Dude– PROOFREADING is a Good thing! It had all the tags for a great story,
but it was totally UNreadable!!!Anonymous readerReport 2009-04-20 21:53:26Could you possibly put quotations to seperate who is talking. Dude– PROOFREADING is a Good thing! I got lost immediantly because I didn’t know who was talking.Anonymous readerReport 2009-04-20 21:44:26Could you possibly put quotations to seperate who is talking. Dude– PROOFREADING is a Good thing! I felt it ran together, and got a bit jumbled up.Anonymous readerReport 2009-04-24 22:34:32WOW. It had all the tags for a great story,
but it was totally UNreadable!!!Anonymous readerReport 2009-04-20 21:53:26Could you possibly put quotations to seperate who is talking. 4 comments«1»Ravenfae420Report 2010-07-02 21:52:37Try breaking it up into paragraphs. 4 comments«1»Ravenfae420Report 2010-07-02 21:52:37Try breaking it up into paragraphs. I couldn’t read this.
